chocoholic

I liked it. At the beginning, you have a girl who I at first assumed was a pesant, and the 'council', who I assumed were like royalty in the world. ...

Well, I wasn't going to read this at first but then I changed my mind. This is... different. I'm not saying it's bad, I liked it, but it's definetely not ...

I see you haven't gotten any reviews. Well, lucky me. I'll be the first, then. Let me start by saying I really enjoyed this. And I'm not just saying that, ...

It was... alright. I can't say it's exactly the type of thing I'm in to, but it was okay. Sometimes you called Joe and boy, that was really confusing. I ...

It was as boring as watching paint dry, but Mother 'insisted' that I study for classes, even though everyone knew that I was a genius compared to anyone in my ...

I liked the general idea, but I think this needs some work. I sat in the attic of our house. Dust wafted everywhere and burned my lungs and eyes like ...

First of all, I liked the plot. Daughter abandoned by mother, then goes to live with her half-sister(?) and family. Becomes depressed and dies. But the actual writing could use ...

Hmm... I'm sorry, but this was cruedly written. It had a good plot, but you didn't pull off the writing of it. Show rather than tell. There was a lot ...

It was cool. A little weird and creepy, but good. So, the woman was old all along, but she was trying to trick herself into thinking that she was beautiful? ...

I loved this. It was sweet, without being sentimental, and sad. The flow of emotion and wording was just right. It was like, the girl knew she had made mistakes ...

In the early fall, my father and I (make father a capital F) sprinkled gasoline over an (Capital S) offering of rotting wood, (Capital O) anointing it without blessing; (Capital ...

You know I loved you, You know you loved me too. But that can't change the things between us, no. And now it's time to let go. These last two ...

This was nice. I liked your descriptions, and the idea of having a mute character. I loved the bit where the mother guessed that the girls were laughing about their ...

Wow! I really don't know what to say. It was intense. Let me think of something that would help you... oh! I know! There seemed to just be a lot ...

Wow! It's an incredibly complex plot and long script. And it's going to get longer! I won't write a huge long critique. I'll just say that I loved it, but ...