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Nice. Is there more to come, or is this it? I liked your descriptions, they were very visual and I could see everything clearly, apart from the girl. We really ...

Hehe. That was funny once you reached the end (at least for my warped sense of humour). I didn't like it at first, but the last line made me laugh ...

Ugh! That's sort of creepy. As for a review, there are a couple of mistakes T he dog started to whine weakly This is just bad formatting, a mistake that ...

Hmm... well, first of all, I wasn't really sure if that was supposed to go in Non-Fiction or if it's actually just a story. Apart from that, I noticed a ...

Hmm... I liked it. The formatting was very good, and the idea isn't something I've read much (although I'm sure it's not uncommon). The spelling and grammar could be improved ...

I found this very fast. You would describe to an extent, but there was no emotion. The best writers make us feel sorry for the characters. You didn't. Your characters ...

Okay, first, I don't think this belongs in Other Fiction. It would probably be better in Fantasy. As for the writing, I found the plot used, the writing rushed and ...

Nice, but it didn't ryhme. I think I could see where you were trying to rhyme, but it didn't actually work. If you want to find out, don't just write ...

Umm... I didn't really get that. What was happening? This didn't really have a beginning, middle and ending. It was more a random scene. WHat was the point? And what ...

Well, I haven't read any more of your poems (I'll check them out, though!) but I didn't like it that much. It seemed to me one of those pieces you ...

I quite liked it. It was short, and more description should be added. Also, paragraphs. It's very annoying to have to read a big lump of text, people don't like ...

That was a good essay. I go to a church and know a few 'pastor's daughters', but my church is a bit different. The father of one of my best ...

That was realy deep. I hate wars, the only thing they're good for is showing us how boring our lives are. In the way of a crit, the writing is ...

I quite liked it, though I'm not sure it belongs in Fantasy Fiction. I thought it was very quick, and it had a fairytale element to it. I didn't get ...

Wow! That was really emotional. I don't know what I would have done if I had gone through all of that. I noticed that you spelt maybe wrong in one ...