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Ohh, this was good, Merry! You can really explain things well, I'm not so good with that and find myself often relying on dialogue. I'm glad I came back to ...

Hiya! My name's Shannon, I'll be reviewing your piece. I'm just going to stick any comments/suggested changes in bold right in the text, okay? If they're changes as opposed to ...

Hellooo. I'm going to put any suggested changes/comments in bold, alrighty? Chapter One In the early 1800s a group of young men, decided that they needed more in life. A ...

This was beautiful! If I really like something, then I find myself absorbed into the story and unable to take a step back and find mistakes, so, none found here ...

Phew! Finally got around to finishing reviewing this for you... sorry! The lights dimmed in the Palace Garner Opera house, all the talking from the gentlemen and high class ladies, ...

Okay, I liked this! It's moving along nicely! Emma Buzz! My alarm clock sounded at exactly seven a.m. telling me to get up and get ready for my first day ...

Hey, Luciano! So, I really liked this. The Spanish was absolutely beautiful! The English one is great as well, but I just thought that after the first "universe on top ...

Chapter 1: Confessions Dear Diary, I'm 14 years old and a freshman at Parkway South. I don't really have replace much with many, and loose the really friends, just a ...

Little Green Men It all started on my fourteenth birthday. I usually opened my eyes slowly, letting them adjust gradually to the light that shone brightly through my half-opened window. ...

Okay, this was kind of confusing. Is this story specifically about Cinderella? Or is it just a Cinderella-esque character? Is this what happens after the fairytale ends? Why are they ...

Okey doke, this was a FANTASTIC start. It was really descriptive and you did a great job of showing and not telling, ;). You mentioned the city was kind of ...

This is far from sucking, my friend! "No!" she choked. Tears began streaming down her face. She fell to the floor, sobs racking her body. Love the description! A long ...

This was so cute, I really enjoyed it. I love stories set in New York, and the whole thing had such great flow. I'll have to go check out the ...

VERY interesting concept! I'm intrigued! Just a few little things to fix... The birds sing in their harmony. The sun fills the first days of spring. Flowers bloom. The insects ...

Just as everyone else has said, you may want to avert your attention to a blog, that would be more fitting for this sort of thing. However, if you wanted ...