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Thanks, this was hugely useful. If you need anything reviewed yourself, give me a shout!

Thank you! That'd be great :) if you would like to read any more then here's the longer version: (yes, I am completely desperate for feedback).

Thanks a lot! Yeah, I think I get a wee bit carried away with myself every now and then when it comes to descriptiveness.

*concerning punctuation, sorry

*but that is mainly

It's brilliant. Your descriptions are really interesting, and your writing style vaguely reminiscent of of American modernist style. I found it quite difficult to read however, but that this is ...

*Completely forgot to finish this sentence: Summer, in this first chapter, appears to be the type of girl every young teenager can relate to just a little - and I ...

Nice, interested to hear the rest :)