charredmarshmellow

I love they way that it doesn't have a specific flow. The second stanza is by far my favorite. I do think that you could eliminate "in a way" It ...

I like what your getting at here. I just have a few suggestions. First paragraph. Your using "it" at least once in each sentence, making it seem redundant, almost as ...

This was so sweet. The only thing that bothers me is the very last line. The whole poem flowed so smoothly but that last bit seems kind of chunky. Not ...