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Re: Ready, Set, Love!
Well. Fisrt of all, this was good. A few nitpicks... something I often do myself, but you need to watch how many comma's you put in. Some are un-neccasary. This ...
Apr 22, 2011 -
Re: Thoughts of a Compulsive Liar
Ok. I really liked this, but at the same time I found it kind of confusing. I didn't really follow it that well. Other then that, it was a very ...
Apr 19, 2011 -
Re: Kiss Me, before I Die
okay. so this was a good story, like everything you write... just remember. Watch when you use the word "threw", when you use it it should actually be spelled "through". ...
Feb 6, 2011 -
Re: Love Story chapter 6: Foxes Forest
Hey y'all! First off, you better review this cuz I said so!!! Second, I would like to say that you need to go read chapter 3 of my story, cuz ...
Feb 2, 2011 -
Re: Catch a Shooting star
The only thing wrong with this was the part of the song that you wrote. You put Catch a shooting star It is really catch a falling star. Other then ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Love Story chapter 4: The Holding Room
I can't believe that I have posted four chapters of Love Story! Oh and there is some mild language and blood and stuff but please enjoy and don't forget to ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Love Story chapter 3: Suspicions
So this is the third chapter, please read the first and second chapters to understand more. Please enjoy and don't forget to comment! And here is the link for the ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: A Simple Love Note
Hello! Welcome to YWS! I am CassidyRose, and I shall be your reviewer today! First off, for a beginner, this was very good. I remember first coming to YWS and ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: The Voice In My Head
Okay, this was a good poem. I am not going to say much, because I don't have much to say. I am going to say, though, that I suggested this ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: May
Okay, so this was very good... I was kind of confused but I guess that is just how the story goes. I am going to take a guess and make ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Love Story chapter 1: Just the Begining
Chapter one is the start of a great story. it has a good plot, that has a good idea. One nitpick though... watch your grammar and spelling. I noticed a ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Tale of a Nose Picker
ONE THING TO SAY... F.U.N.N.Y... and cute, adorable, made my day... yadayadayada (okay, that was 4 things but oh well) :D ;D
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Ghost's of my Life's Past (Part 1)
Okay. This was FANTASTIC!!! Ignore what everybody else says about it, it is like, WOW. I am doing a story about super rich well dressed girls, and this is like ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Engulfed By My Flames
Okay. This poem sounds like it is a mixture of fights with friends and boyfriends... so here goes my re-write... "You called me names, teased me about guys blackmailed, so ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Colors
Ok, seeing as I wrote a different version of your other poem, I guess I'll do that with all of your poems... so here I go. "Confusing confusing confusing Colors ...
Jan 30, 2011
