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Once in a while, on this website, a lucky critter comes across a poem that stands out above the terrible, the pretty good and even the very good. Palantalid, this ...

This sounds like one of those conversations you have in your head and wish you had the guts to say to the person, you know? It doesn't really sound like ...

This is really good. I love that someone is finally putting this idea into words, but nowadays its really hard to write a good love poem that's not cliche. i ...

This is very dry, but thorough. I'm sure you got an A on your essay, but I don't really see why you posted it. The sentences were simplistic, straight-forward and ...

That was so funny! It did look very unprofessional without capitalizations and punctuation, but it was hilarious! The mom didn't seem very real, alternating between joking about shooting her son ...

Hey Wesley I agree. This poem, while heartwarming, needs a specific instance to make it really good. The cliche is overwhelming and, to be honest, the poem is pretty boring. ...

I love this, but, as always, there are issues. One of them is the principal of everything we poets hold dear: SHOW DON'T TELL. One example is the line that ...

I think you have an interesting take on it, the whole prison/only home thing. I actually love the idea of it, this murderer/kidnapper/arsonist feeling so sad about leaving the only ...

Fand is wise. Listen to him. He pretty much said everything, though, so I'll just add one little nit-picky detail. There was one line that you repeated, "Because you were ...

Hmmm....how about Beginning to See as a title? There were a few points when I was reading this when I had to stop and reread, to get the gist of ...

I disagree. I think the n thing was distracting and juvenile, kind of unofficial. The poem itself was pretty good though. I felt like the rhythm was off a lot ...

Hi. Question: why did you take something this long and turn it into something so brutally short? I can totally see this story as one of those great ones that ...

Boy, that was dense! That formatting is great on WordPerfect or whatever program you use, but it doesn't work for us readers. It hurts the eyes. On to the big ...

I feel like I've read this before. This is the kind of thing where you find yourself skipping a sentence here and there, knowing you won'rt miss anything important. It ...

This short story is breaking one of the most basic rules of writing. You guessed it! You're telling, not showing. Show us what's going on in the writer's head, rather ...