canislupis

Thanks all! Your reviews are very helpful. Author13: thanks you for taking the time to review this, it was greatly appreciated. As I mentioned before I'm very anxious to improve ...

Ask a mod to move it plz..... This isn't a story-book. Its ok though, anyone can make a mistake like that..... :)

Ooh..... one more thing I noticed: A handshake is definitely not a very alien gesture..... One sec Nemaida is gesticulating wildly, and the other person has no idea whats going ...

Ok..... Most of the errors seem to have been quoted already. this was entirely unexpected, and almost completely unlike any of the other ideas you've used. On the plus side, ...

Thanks! That was very helpful.... As I said, this was my NaNo novel, so I haven't done any major editing yet. I'm not suprisied that there are a few little ...

Wow, thanks for the review! I just got back from vacation.... I'll definitely take all the things you said into consideration..... Thanks again, and Happy New Year!!!!!!!!

oh.... Maybe make that clearer? I was under the impression that it really WAS a insect... Now I see it was a laser pointer. Also, about the suddeness, it still ...

urggh.... i reviewed this already!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It must not have taken my post... Sorry about that.. I'll redo it later. :D

Thanks! I'll remember what you said. Thanks again for the review!

I'm back! here is my critique: :) frowned when I heard the True’s voice. The? I think you meant "heard True's voice" The repetition of "True" in this paragraph was ...

ANy chance of the next part coming out soon! Its been like MONTHS!!!!

AHHHH! theres a pony on my desk thats staring at me with huge, purple eyes. :lol: I'm gonna go read the second part. ....

Aww, thanks, now I feel nice.. :D There actually is quite a bit more of this, but I don't know if I'll post it or not. Do you think I ...

Edited!!! I think I got most of the things you pointed out..... Thanks for the review, I'm glad you liked it. :D

Haha, thanks. :)