canislupis

Hi again! I think I like this one even better than the other one! I especially love the ending. :) Lol, I don't have anything at all to say! I ...

Hi there! :) I really don't know how to critique the technical side of poetry at all since I don't write it. :( But, that said, I do have three ...

Ok, first of all, I’m a homeschooler too! You should check out our user group. ;) Here is your requested review. I’ll get to my overall thoughts later. For now ...

Hi there! And welcome to YWS! I hope you like it as much as I do. So far, my experience has been great and I've learned more about writing here ...

Hi! I’m actually the first! :o Anyhow, on to the review as requested. Line-by-line first: When I awoke, the sun was just rising over the tall mountains. I quickly rose, ...

Hi! Like Lava said, I don't think I'll be reading the previous chapters, so I'll just go from what's in this one. Line-by-line first. :) He kissed her forehead. God ...

I'm depressed because I can't seem to download this, and I really want to read it! There's no way you could post the actual text, is there? Because I really ...

I was totally going to point out what EliteHusky said. Oh well. So, yeah, I agree with him about the emotion flowing out of this. I love it! I also ...

I partly agree with Snoink, but I still liked it. The only thing I have to add is that I would've liked it a lot if she had refused and ...

Hi! LOVE this! Shosanna's personality was perfect and I got a very real sensation of her terror. The pacing was nearly perfect as well. A knock sounded from the front ...

Hi again! So, I like the way this is going so far. I love the way the accents sound authentic, and I still get that western feel. :) I also ...

I'm not going to pretend I know how to critique poetry, but I did like this. Quick note, though: "Its" is possesive. I think you meant "It's we" as in ...

Well-dressed figures swirled in the ballroom, for the moment careless to the events occurring in the world outside. Merry music resonated from musicians situated throughout the hall, and it combined ...

Hi there! Here to review (obviously). Sorry this took so long. So, I like this. It is very short, but I have an intense fear of long prologues. Why? They ...

Hi! Here to review as requested, though I seemed to have been just a bit too slow. :) Private Peaceful was assigned reading last year for me, and it's really ...