canislupis

This was better than the first..... but not that much better. The first half is different, and less confusing, with better descriptions. However, half the stuff that reviewers pointed out, ...

This piece I found extremely hard to read, so I can't give an in-depth review. I think you should move this back to standard format, instead of the weird fancy ...

this is annoying. I find some stuff that I didn't like, and then I see that the reviewers before me have taken care of all of it. Anyway, good work! ...

Creepy! Anyway, I really liked this. But.... I found that the descriptions are run on sentences in some parts of this piece, and it also kind of gets meandering and ...

This was pretty good, and as a fan of the harry potter series, I like to read this kind of stuff. However, other than the mistakes already pointed out, There ...

This was pretty good. I don't have any comments on the actual story, but in the writing I couldn't help but notice that there are question marks everywhere. In the ...

This was good! I don't have any comments for the grammatical or spelling side, and the other reviewers have pretty much taken care of what I found. Third person would ...

This was okay, but like the other reviewers said, it needs a little clarification. I didn't find any grammar mistakes other than the ones gadi already pointed out, so good ...

Well, I found the same things wrong with this as I did with the first one. (See my review) I think you definitely need to space out your posts, since ...

This was ok, but kindof boring. You don't need to space it out so much, and it has almost a dry, reporting of facts kindof feeling. I know this is ...

hmmm, it seems that misty didn't like it much, and we can tell it didn't hold her attention to long since she seems to think that the sotry is from ...

hehehe, this was well written and hilarious. There are a few minor punctuational and grammatical errors, but nothing to serious. I was just reading that there actually IS a holiday ...

This was pretty good. In some parts you are missing a period, or the sentence just trails off. try running a punctuation check in microsoft word. it will probably help ...

This was okay, it had good characters, (and by that I mean well developed)and the whole thing wasn't too bad. Your dialogue is forced and unrealistic and there are punctuation ...

This was ok, but confusing and repeptetive. I won't list all the grammatical errors, but all the same it needs a good edit. You also need to make it clear ...