camronmarshall

No. I couldn't find a hidden meaning, because it wasn't hidden. It was glaring.

Thank you Joshua, I have read some of your work and I will write an appraisal of something of yours soon.

You need to put in a hint of conflict, foreshadow something bigger so we keep reading. You lost me pretty quick

I'm not a big fan of this simple rhyme scheme and shallow metaphor. But it seems to work on some level so well done.

That's nice. I like the addition of the picture too. I hate war, you can say that. That's something you are definitely alloud to hate

hmm, not bad. Not bad at all. It wasn't good either. In fact, it's to early to tell because this is so short.

*Yawn* really didn't do much for me, I'm afraid.