bubblewrapped

I agree with CrossMyHeart, this is a lovely poem. I do think the rhymes in stanzas two and three are off a bit; it seems like you're reaching a bit ...

Hope your exams went well :) I just finished mine too -- they suck, don't they? As for the poem, I love the way you maintain an air of breathlessness ...

Hi there, Welcome to the site! I hope you're enjoying your stay, and would just like to say thanks for submitting two reviews before posting this :) As for your ...

I loved the first two stanzas of this: you create a strong image and follow through nicely. IMHO, though, the third stanza starts to get a little iffy. I remember ...

I agree with both of the previous reviews re: punctuation and rhyming. Also, be careful of slipping into archaic language to plumb for a rhyme: "espies" makes it sound like ...

He doesn't know, that I need him. This is a good, strong beginning. You should follow it up immediately with something that leads into the 'story' of the poem. This: ...

To be honest, I think you've summed this up best yourself: This poem isn't meant for guilt, Isn't meant for tears, It only shows how I felt, Not meant for ...

I love the idea behind this, but I felt it was a little repetitive, particularly in the first few lines (say, from "World moves..." to "sun setting"). I think it ...

You have the form right, but something seems lacking. What I love about haikus is the way they can pack so much meaning into something so short. I can tell ...

Well, you already know I like this XD So let's see...nitpicking time! Dark, empty and confined, [no comma] in a lightless, dirty room. [no full stop - the sentence carries ...

I loved this; the rhythm fitted the theme very well and the imagery was haunting. My only real nit-picks would be the overuse of the word "trickle" in stanza 1 ...

I liked parts of this and disliked other parts. It kind of felt as though you wrote it one way to begin with, then went over it later and kind ...

Ha, I've finally finished reading this episode :D Sunshine is awesome again; she and Lena are so amusing. I agree with Rieda that James seems oddly familiar o.0 Maybe he's ...

Warm gaze from cool, blue eyes. Love as clear as the mourning skies. But like all things in life, it ended slowly and it ended with strife. Firstly, "mourning" should ...

I tried to come up with something substantial to say, but I failed. I guess I just don't do scripts so well XD The only thing I really felt could ...