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Re: X-City: Prologue,Chapter One, Chapter Two
add these things, if you'd like. change these things, if you'd like. I ran across the deserted wasteland of Earth and stopped when I saw Terra holding a helpless , ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: Missions United Chapter 1: Final Test
Hey. This will be my longest review so far.. And I don't know what to say, but I've tried to correct some nit-picks: "So, have you ready?" said the head ...
Jun 29, 2010 -
Re: Wire Hearts and Paper Dreams (1)
I really like this idea. Anyway, you're a good writer and even though I didn't check, I couldn't find any grammar errors. But as I said, I didn't check.. But ...
Apr 17, 2010 -
Re: Drained {Chapter Four}
Well, I do not want you to stop writing. I want this story to be longer. A lot more longer. Anyway, I like it. That's why you can't stop writing. ...
Apr 15, 2010 -
Re: Drained {Chapter Three}
Aw. You're too good! I love this story so much and today I'm going to a cabin without Internet connection. That's sad. I hate it. I hope you'll post chapter ...
Apr 1, 2010 -
Re: Attaction and the Bad Boy(3)
Clothes exploded out of Bridget's closet. I have to admit that this sentence is a bit funny. xD Anyway, I like your story so far and can't wait until you ...
Mar 31, 2010 -
Re: Footsteps (tentative title)
I was not even sure when it was that things at home turned into this mess. I think this sentence is a bit weird, but I don't know. To tell ...
Mar 31, 2010 -
Re: Hope
The staccato pounding of the 50 cal. machine gun tore at the howling winds, the shrieking chopper blades, like ethereal monsters in a twilight battle, roaring their fury , . ...
Mar 31, 2010 -
Re: Drained {Chapter Two}
Your story is great. So far. And I want to read more, so when you post another chapter pm me? Thanks. Well, your plot is really good too. I like ...
Mar 30, 2010 -
Re: Winter Wonderland Chapter 1
I noticed that you had a capital letter in a few words in the middle of the sentence, and they shouldn't be there. I also think that you can use ...
Feb 22, 2010 -
Re: Change, chapter 1
I really liked this chapter. Meave looks like a very cute girl, actually. Maybe Matthew are a nice boy? I don't know, yet. Every popular guy isn't a bad person, ...
Apr 18, 2009
