brix_strat

Thank you very very much. I will definitely look into those things. ^-^ I plan to write some more to chapter 1 tonight. I'm debating whether (sp?) or not I'm ...

I agree. You need a little more description. Describe how they talk maybe? What they are doing while they talk? Otherwise I think it sounds very interesting. :3 keep writing. ...

Thank you. Those sound like good sugestions. I'll change that. Now...I just have to figure out where I'm going with this thing because it was a story my friend and ...

That's a good Idea, I'll think about it. I am always open for suggestions. : D

Thank you. Typos suck...when typing...they are so dang annoying, then i can never find them when I re-read my work. >.

Thought I'd just resurect this and bring it to the front. It's been awhile. so...erm...yes. : D

Thank you both! That helps alot! I will most definately work with what you have said. : D

That...was REALLY good. Like...amazing. You are a super amazing writer. Keep it up! Dang, I couldn't stop reading. That is a good sign, its normally hard to get me interested ...

I'm bad at grammer. lol. Thank you for the input.

Nice! I love it. *clings to story* definately continue. I think you showed the characters very well. This story is very interesting. *nods* I really do love it....alot.

Thank you everyone. I will definately think about the stuff you have said, and also I will change what you suggested. It helps alot. *nods* thank you again.

*claps* I loved it! You are an amazing writer! I envie you! >< Keep it up! And i will sue the editor too if it doesn't get published. *nods* XD

Take it a tad slower. You seem to go a little fast and its a little confusing at the part where Leo stumbles... Other than that, I don't see anything ...

*claps happily* Write more! i want to know what happens! I couldn't stop reading...

haha, thanks...I thought i caught all the Equil and Equal things...>< i knew i missed some. hahaha, and thank you i will change that stuff.