britlitfantw

First, may I give you a round of applause? This is better than anything I wrote at 14 (haha, like that’s so long ago ^_^ ) and made my eyes ...

... definitely very gripping. I'm curious to know why she's there, who she is, what's going on, etc. Your imagery is very good, and this line especially stuck with me: ...

Excellent job - I don't generally read this sort of story, not that I have anything against them, they just don't always hold my interest; however, this kept me reading, ...

I'm not a guy, but, in terms of the writing in general, I really liked it! Your description was good, I didn't feel like you were 'telling' rather than 'showing'; ...

Great job. The one thing I might suggest is to tighten up some lines, so they have the same meaning but aren't so long. It breaks the flow of the ...

I don't really feel there are too many 'fear's in the last part. I think repitition suits a poem sometimes, and this was one of those times. This was a ...