bludragon525

Hey! Please ignore dogs. He doesn't know what he's saying. I loved your poem. It was a bit confusing, but after reading it again, I understood everything. Your rhyming rule ...

Hey! Great poem! I loved the rhyming part in the first couple of lines; however, it really does break in that one section. It's confuses the reader, and it DOES ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! I'm rather new here too, seeing that I joined a couple of days ago, but I already love this site. Hopefully you will too. :) Yeah, ...

Hey! Wow meggy. You had me captivated from the first stanza. There isn't much I would do to change it. I thought it was already very powerful. The theme was ...

Hey! Great poem! I liked it a lot. However....... I didn't think the poem flowed very well. As kris said, it was a little uncomfortable to read. Until isn't really ...

Hey! Great job, as usual. There just was one thing that I didn't quite understand that the reviewers above me didn't mention. I shocked myself by chuckling three times and ...

Hey! This poem didn't really flow as well as I would have thought. The lines weren't thought out very well, and the whole poem itself didn't really make sense. I ...

Hey! I liked your poem. There were just a few things... The last stanza confused me. By that, I mean it didn't really fit in with the rest of the ...

Hey! Okay, lot of mistakes in this one. You misuse some commas, and as far as I can tell, frighten should be PAST TENSE. So listen and listen well should ...

Hey! I like this piece, but it doesn't have that message that connects the reader to the author. It lacks the emotional pull that keeps the reader's interest. Maybe you ...

Hey! As everyone has already said, there is a separate forum for lyrics. You should put this there. I agree with almost all of the reviewers above me. The lyrics ...

Hey! Great idea. Your rhyming rule didn't really help the poem at all, though; in fact, it made it a little more confusing than it could be. Remember, poems don't ...

I Am I Am, yet what [s]i[/s] I am , none cares or knows . I Am forsaken by my friends like a memory lost . I Am the self ...

Great job on this! I can't wait to see where this goes. Basket and Retrogradatory basically said it all for me, except for one thing.... And so I believed them. ...

Hey. Great job! There's just a few things I'd like to say..... "It is my scar" and "It is my wound" are a bit redundant. As Jon said, we, the ...