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In regards to the comment you made on my profile (replying here since I can't seem to find a way to reply to profile comments). Unexpected in a good way, ...

Well that was ... unexpected :-)

Probably a good thing :D I had to make a few minor alterations this morning. Mainly putting in missing words or changing correctly spelled worlds for the grammatically correct version. ...

Also, I'm still confused as to Korodo's reasons for keeping Trace around. The answer that Barak gave feels more like empty platitudes. You stated talking about this "insurgency", which may ...

Why is Trace talking to himself? Everything he's saying could be easily spliced into the narration, and as an added bonus, would tie his POV more engaginly into the action. ...

Cut them out, and replace them with more concrete examples--maybe something he did in the past that also displays his inner nature. Oh forgot to add, I did something like ...

I'm currently editing the next two chapters (which are the last two I've written so far) trying to incorporate some of the suggestions you've made. Particularly, trying to describe how ...

This is a good start and it got me gripped. What did they do to him? Or should that be what did they put IN him. Post a heads up ...

Thanks for the comments. I'll read through and digest them later, there's a lot of them :-) But to answer a few specific points: A gryojet is a gun that ...

Reading this, I get visions of Speed crossed with Battle Royale crossed with Running Man. Excellent stuff, I'd love to read more.

Next chapter is here .

I don't understand. Why didn't Ren tell him that Jiro had given him the baby? Or does Kiba not know who Jiro is? Forgot to respond to this. Ren didn't ...

Chapter Two: Country's Fall Morning, Corday the 9th of Tanot, 674 AG (After Godswar) Several miles outside of the village of Benbridge, home to the Toshiko's At just over 6ft ...

I try to post at least one review before I post something. But its hard to spot things that other reviewers have missed sometimes and I'm wary of just making ...

Issue Two Staring down at the blood staining his hands, his son’s blood, Sam was lost. His mind, usually as sharp as a monofilament blade, was spinning; contemplating every what-if ...