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Thanks again for your comments, people! I would like you to know that I am not ignoring your comments, but that really isn't enough for me to rewrite the entire ...

Thanks! I'm going to re-post an improved version of this using your helpful hints. Just one clarification. When Kirthin calls Searle a "fool", he's actually joking around, pretending to be ...

Good job! Except one part were the Zombie Watch Committee guy answers the phone saying "Brains?" Wouldn't one be a bit suspicious? Strange way to awnser the phone i think

Excellent. Very good work, but try to avoid passive voice.