blackpencil

Whoa. Nice. Just a few nitpicks. We stood silently as they charged into the room and threw torches onto the furniture and screamed blood hurdling cries. Should be blood-curdling. They ...

Hey, I'll be a reviewer. Good job on your NaNoWriMo. Anyway, I feel like picking and prying, since it's a small piece. (mwahahaha...) The Mists blanketed the narrow valley. Any ...

I'm sorry to say I disagree with this poem. You definitely have a way with words. Even though it doesn't seem to have any visible pattern (Which, correct me if ...

Excellent. That was on of the best pieces I have ever read on this site. I actually haven't read the Divine Comedy, but according to the other reviewers, this is ...

In poems, there should be some sort of pattern or rhythm, I think. Your last stanza has two more verses than the other two (or verse has more stanzas, whatever. ...

Hi I'm blackpencil, how are you doing? First of all, starting your poem with "Yet I feel" isn't quite right. The word "yet" implies that you are continuing a sentence ...

That was good! I'm not the type to pick and pry,I'd rather let YOU find out for yorself. So here's the jist of things: You messed up on some grammar. ...

Hi it's me again and I need to give you a review! Waking up from a warm, comfortable sleep is rather like a feather slowly drifting down from the top ...

Kay, got your message and I'm here to drop a comment. Nothing personal, but I like the other one better. It was shorter, like a prologue is supposed to be. ...

Hello, I'm blackpencil and I'll review this piece today. I liked the story, to start, especially the names. They're very creative, and sound like mysterious aliases or codenames. I like ...

I don't feel like being majorly over-harsh today, so you're in luck... Just kidding, it was a good piece! Just a few things... The looking glass mirror hanging over the ...

In reply to one of your replies, sorry about your grandpa. My regards. In reply to your story, good job! I hope you didn't write this piece to dwell forever ...

...Wow. That was really good. I love how you got the idea for the story (Yes, I read the intro). When I first started reading I thought, "Am I seeing ...

I like the imagery. Very good, a subtle hint of sadness mixed with the good memories. A lot of people have already mentioned the grass, so I won't. Oh wait, ...

Yo, it's blackpencil here to review your work. Starting off, you didn't desribe ANYTHING. You barely desribed the Black Lake, you hardly described the monster, and you didn't decribe the ...