bisquit

Ok, so maybe my story doesn't interest you but i was actually quite pleased with it. All i have ever wanted to do is write and i'd appreciate constructive criticism ...

the point of the necklace being described in detail is so that it has more effect later when it becomes more significant. You arent meant to know the pendants purpose ...

thank you very much people. and i dont think its a real street. but who knows?! hehe

i really like this, it was straight to the point and didnt drag on unnecesarily. the rhyming is great and therefore unforced and succesful. it has a good rhythm and ...

You should include some more descriptive techniques to really get the reader involved with the story.