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Thanks so much for the review! I sort of wrote this as an experiment with all the different points of view to see how that worked and you're absolutely right, ...

Thanks, Stori! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

Thanks, Dems! :) I really appreciate you reviewing this! And you pointed out exactly the same thing my Mum did with the differentiation between the points of view. I have ...

Haha! This is soooooo awegreat! I love it so much. Genius!

It is about my dad and his alcoholism and how he is loosing the person he is I guess or how I am seeing the dad I once new disappear. ...

Thank you for the reviews Pippiedooda and Haruno :) Haruno I'm a little confused. In the previous part I wrote dialogue that was '"Aela! Aela!" worry...' and you said to ...

Yeah that makes sense, Thank you! :) I'm just doing a quick edit now and possibly posting the second part tonight or tomorrow.

Thank you Haruno! Yes you give very helpful reviews thank you! And you keep me right with grammar lol I knew that about the comma before a name but I ...

Thank you June! :D Just what I need, lots of punctuation help! I'm not so good at it lol Jay, I'm sorry but if I cut this part down then ...

Hey Texan :) Finally here to look over some more of your story, been busy with university work/reading of late. You have definitely listened to what reviewers said and have ...

Yay! I'm glad your continuing :) I get the whole not wanting to write moods. It happens to me a lot lol

Thanks Nutty! I find it very odd that everyone is pointing out this whilst thing lol whilst is part of my vocabulary in everyday use. Like when I'm just talking ...

Thanks Haruno! It's nice to get lots of opinions on a piece so you can see how best to edit it :) It's so weird that you think Mailan is ...

Oh and by the way! Your supposed to have given 2 reviews before you post a piece of work :) So get on out there and review someone else's work ...

Thanks Rosey! I sorted out those few nit picks and I'll have a think about what you said about the Morlongs. I did want to hold back information on them ...