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But this was something we did not foresee, we did not see this coming. - I didn't really like this sentence, there was a lot of see and we did ...

Hey Pea :) I clinch my fist, the jagged edges of the rock cutting into my hand. - I think clench would be better here, clinch just makes me think ...

Hey Yoday :) She tore herself out of her bed, washed her face in the ice-cold water, and got dressed. - I'm not sure tore is the right word here ...

Hey Stells! Just popped in for a review! Lifting her hand in both his own, he pressed his lips against it - If you mean he is kissing her hands ...

Hey Maki, Ok here we go :P it created a fait yellow glow, while the stars created tiny dots of radiance around it. - I think you meant 'faint' here ...

Hey Yoday! Back again! :P The dock resumed its hustle and bustle not long after the second murder of the day had disrupted it. It was impossible - it it ...

Hey Kat! I'm here finally! lol So lets start with some nit picks - Like with creepy, huge eyes. - This doesn't sound quite right. Maybe you could try switching ...

Hey Yoday! Here I am again lol With probably less detail this time xD I only picked up on one nit pick and my nit picks are usually things that ...

Hey Yoday! I'm here finally! ^^ So! I guess this is more of a general overall review than a specific to this section review because I have been reading through ...

Hey Kyllorac :) Here is your review. As I told you I don't do grammar but I don't think you need much grammar help anyway. I'll just do a sort ...

Hey blackpencil :) There was nothing that I could pick out that was particularly wrong with the writing, I'm not a grammar person and it seems that the two reviews ...

Hey El! I noticed a few things that bothered so I'll just note them down for you :) “Just breathe, Zephyra. We learned last year that they’re caused by a ...

Hey Lil! I'm here to have a look at your story! Finally, I've been waiting a long time to read this! lol Here we go then, allowed her to obtain ...

This so reminds me of Chihiro from the film Spirited Away. Right at the beginning when they are going to their new home and she is peering out the window. ...

Hey ima :) I'm here like you asked to look over your story! Here it goes! I desperately want to let my story flow out of my lips . - ...