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Hey Pokemonbragirl :) Nice name! lol Next to her feet a basket woven from her mother's hand rested, its content flowing over the edge. - This is a bit of ...

Hey Dono :) Usually I would start off by going through and listing all the mistakes I found but I'm guessing that you don't really want that, plus other people ...

Hey Pea! he has never actually compliment my work . - Think you meant complimented. I focus on my paper; my eyes follow the lines on the desk seem to ...

Hey Lumi! So you dared me to review this. I'm terrible at poems so I have no idea! Let me first instinct was that it's too abrupt. I just managed ...

Hey Pforrest :) What I'll say first is that it's good to separate out your paragraphs and diagloue. Mainly because when people click on your story and consider reviewing it, ...

Hey parigirle :) Here as requested! I have never done it, but I know exactly what it would feel like to run my fingers through your hair, delicate lengths of ...

Hey Rosey! Just thought I would have a look over this :) Cautiously he stood, chair’s sound ripping through the otherwise silent office. - I had to read this line ...

Hey El! Here as requested :) I dug my toes in the wet sand, feeling it squish into the cracks in my feet. - I feel like cracks is the ...

Hey Durr! :) his clothing the same colour as that in the recruitment posters that hung half-ripped off the wall all along the brick wall facing me. - I think ...

Hey Anne :) Pyrrha, Epimetheus’ daughter, and Deucalion, her husband and Prometheus’ son, were the sole survivors during Zeus’ grand Deluge. - There is nothing particularly wrong with this first

Hey Gabriella :) The film I had been so anxious to get to Walgreens would never be developed. - I always think that it is a bit weird when people ...

Hey Jeanette :) There were many half floors, each with only a wooden latter to reach each one. - I think it should be 'ladder' here and not latter. Also ...

Hey Retro :) My doctor says i have a problem. - Need to Capitalise the i I say nothing, i just sit there. - Need to Capitalise the i Make ...

Hey PEA! I said I would do this last night but I was too tired lol So here I am now! Who woulda thought this crazy old lady would have ...

Hey Seibhris :) Fred and three others followed behind closely - I think it would be better if you phrased this 'Fred and three others followed closely behind' it just ...