beautyandthefish

Thank you so much! Yes, I did screw up the name haha. I was in a hurry. I realllyyy suggest you read the other three chapters to get the full ...

Hey guys! Thanks for the great reviews. I'm currently working on the third chapter so bare with me! I'm trying to incorporate all of your great suggestions! love, beauty

Thanks Guys! I will check out those tips. Yeah this was mostly just me writing blah blah that didn't make too much sense, and had to get it.

Thank you! That was really fantastic advice.

I just recently read that book again just for fun, and found that it was even better the second time. It was a very moving and poignant book, and displayed ...

It's a good start, but does read like a summary, and doesn't feel like a story to me. Try adding in some more details.