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Sorry, *already. As for the ice rain... Aurin is capable of effecting conditions in a set area, any more that is detrimental to his well being. It's kind if like ...

It's more that with the name, it drew just enough clout that he cold command a specs ops squad under the table without them asking too many questions (as that ...

I left dates out intentionally to throw you a bit, but hopefully understanding would dawn on you later... Notice keywords like "Boston", "Marlboro", "Jameson", "MIT"...

I can see what you mean about this chapter being a bit throwaway, but in writing I kind of had the idea that while certain revelations can be made about ...

Excellent points! I totally missed some of this stuff. You are the reviewer I need, but not the one I deserve.

You might be right! But then again, the Dornish are of the Andals, aren't they? This raises an interesting conundrum.

Oh yeah, and as for the character break between Mara and Angela, it should be there, but YWS formats things weird. I'll fix it when I can.

Yeah I totally understand where you're coming from with these points. Meredus' character IS a bit tropy, but again, that in itself is a plot point. I can't wait for ...

Hey there! All in all, this is actually pretty good! I'll just leave a few things that I noticed. [q]Sitting on the bed, the board rough against my fingers, my ...

Haha. That was cute. I really liked it.

Very well. It shall be so. :) Thank you for your time!

Good stuff, homie! Keep it going.

Also, in a new revision, I've addressed a lot of these points... I should put it up xD

All will be clear in time As for the colonel acting unprofessional... maybe it didn't matter if he's unprofessional or not, given he thinks he's hot stuff. Or maybe...

Its a far-future setting, though how it got there is for me to know and for you to find out ;)