bcain

I've read all your chapters, and I'm still wondering what time period is this??????? First they sound like 1800's, then it sound like late 1900's, then you switch again. very ...

Talk about truth. Your descriptions were very vivid, I could smell the smoke, hear the girls whispering their crushes, and see the guys' expressions as everyone made fun of the ...

i like your title, it makes a person stop and wonder what's up. also, the 'lisp' Cecelia has appears to be a result of her perverted father's abuse and makes ...

you really have to look for the co-relation between the first and second stanzas. Let it flow naturally, like Mesh says. Maybe use words with the same 'feel' as the ...

Not to be redundant, but your word usage made this piece powerful in a cool, autumny way. I liked your descriptions, but especially liked,"birds sang ,though faint in the wind". ...