babymagic18

It was good but you need character description. It is needed in all forms of writing without it you can't really get a picture of the things happening in the ...

I really liked the way you put it. It is the truth and more people in my opinion should realize that. it's in our everyday lives. I should have thought ...

I really liked your writing it flowed well. Yours was a piece I didn't want to read to qickly in fear I might miss something. Keep it up this was ...

This was only okay for me. I liked it don't get me wrong but I felt as if it were really missing something and I can't put my finger on ...

This was a well written piece I enjoyed it very much. I look forward to reading more of your work in the near future. Ya know after I'm done getting ...

It was nice but the surrounding needs to be talked about like...a cool breeze blew through his hair or something like that, Something that can really make a person want ...

That was cute in its own little way. Advice watch out for commas in your writing they are needed in writing. They are used in speech as well even though ...

I thought is was a well written story. It's a good story about a sister relationship. Some things you can't take back and I think that was an important lesson ...

This type of thing really happens in life though people are sent to prison for crimes they really didn't commit but others choose to believe otherwise and i think that ...

This was a well written piece one thing though was that I didn't get a character visual and that would have been really helpful to me I don't know about ...

This was good the beginning was excellent a lot of visual. I could really get into the story. I won't lie I think you are actually a strong writer. If ...

I really liked the title uh, I didn't get a real visual for the character and that is really important in any story. The beginning needs work it flowed but ...

I really enjoyed reading this piece it actually pulled at my heart strings. I read a lot of other peoples work but none like yours. It was really good. I ...

It was okay. You might have wanted to add the whole scene in their meeting and what in the moment of their meeting spark the flame between them. In the ...

Wow I won't even lie to you this waas really good I really got into the story and could mentally grab a picture from your words the way they all ...