babymagic18

It was long and you don't want it to be that long that only makes readers want to skip to the end and see if that's any good. You don't ...

Way to long for my liking and I didn't like the start of it. A fine summers day that does not grab my attention at all. It actually sounds like ...

It was okay I guess but you need work in the description area. The way you worded didn't flow and that's important in writing. If it does not flow then ...

This piece was a bit of a problem for me only b/c it was so long and that drew my attention away. You don't want that from your readers, ever. ...

Oh boy this was a long one. But it was good I really liked reading it. You just have to work on making them shorter is all. I really liked ...

I wanted to thank you for reading my piece. I only stopped there b/c I didn't know what else to add that's all. But i liked your piece a little ...

Wanted to say thank you for reading my piece it was nice of you and I appreciate it for a second time. Your work is well done. Oh, and another ...

uh? long much? Sorry you probably read that from someone else already. But it is the truth when you submit a piece you don't want others to look away you ...

This was interesting it was well written I must say. What I really liked your piece was that it caught my attention from the start it did not make me ...

Oh i have to say I really emjoyed reading this, honestly. I'm not even a huge fan of anything that has to do with vampires but I must say you ...

Oh wow this was good probably the best I've read in a long time. It made me want to read more. Your good. Keep in mind there are a lot ...

I like the title it was catchy. It caught my attention I likeed that. Just a reminder if you didn't know. If the story is lengthy the way your is ...

Who is this he? and why is he in your head? Where were you going with this story and what were you trying to get the reader to see in ...

I liked it but it really was far too short of a start. It really needed to be at least a big paragraph or two paragraphs to really catch a ...

This was only okay because you put the description in but it was really all over the place and that's really not what you should do in your writing. If ...