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SLUT! (Sorry, I just had to say) Anyway, I had no objections to this chapter. You might want to describe how the music made her feel, and more about the ...

I'm sorry, but Anti-pop has already done a great job. I didn't even notice whalf of he things that she pointed out. Good work!

Sorry about the mucked up quotes, but I'm too tired to fix them!

Okay, thank you Evi! I'll work on that, and then edit the posts in a couple of days.

Hey Evi, Thanks for the review, I have made changes according to peoples comments, but I didn't post them here, Sorry! I'll do that next time, and go back and ...

Thank you! That helped Anit-pop!

Yeah, reading back on it I kinda get it, I just wasn't really in the mood a while ago. This is posted in the 'Lyric Poetry' forum, so I think ...

ha ha, Were you just reading the prologue for Shepherd and lamb? Because I was, and I just thought of that when you said "Killer next door" Any-who... I can ...

Sure, just Make sure it's relevent to teh story, and then it'll be fine!

You did slant the words! you might just want to have it as a famous quote or something, from another book... or a famous saying. I've read books like that, ...

Couldn't find anything wrong with that! Good work!

Pretty good, and I don't usually get/review potery! *GIVES GOLD STAR!*

Hi, I will lay off the grammar, but I would just like to point this out. "Your , your not human." Hmmm... First of all, it should probably be something ...

*Gold Star* Nice work! Couldn't find any nit-picks here. Sorry, I don't get the last line either. Might want to get rid of the vocal cords but! Good script!

Someone once told me while ago, that I had a trait of seeing things for what they really are, and always picking on the fine details. should be... Someone [s]once ...