ashleylee

Hello, Okay, all my corrections are in bold so...here is goes! :D I am a set of wind chimes which hang from a dirty window frame located in the third ...

Yeah, I am at a lost. I have nothing to critique on except this: His bulging muscles indicated great strength, but physical power could indicate nothing about his ability to ...

Hey, these are my nit-picks: She was already too excited for words. Yeah, she enjoyed sitting round the house in her pyjamas Pyjamas ? I'm guessing pajama's instead! :D And ...

First, to chocoholic : This is obviously set in the furture during an alien invasion. At least, that's how I took it (if I'm wrong Conrad Rice , please set ...

Hey, I thought this was kind of funny :D I mean, the things you said in there made me smile. *beams* Overall, you have a good start here but you ...

Wow...very...wierd. I agree with the other's above that this was so out-of-this world. I can kind of picture this turning into a horror story type of thing. You could totally ...

Hey! This was sort of too short for me...not a lot of comment on. I did notice one thing however, Glad I can't envy them that. This was confusing. I ...

Sorry that it took forever for me to review this next chaper! :oops: But okay, I thought this was good. The beginning with the mysterious blonde kid caught my attention! ...

Hey! This was good! :D First, let me give you my nit-picks! The defendant himself allowed a broad grin split his face, a grimace that never reached his malicious eyes, ...

This was cute! Ten-year-old's learning to swear! lol :D The hot Summer day had turned us into popsicles - two frozen treats sitting side by side, excreting sticky perspiration in ...

You are doing so well with this! :D The more I read, the more I get wrapped up into these people's lives. All the issues they are dealing with are ...

OH, this is so good! :D It is so different from anything I have ever read and it just keeps getting better and better. My only suggestions is that some ...

Hola! I liked this. It was a little short to really do a full critique but you definitely caught my attention! :D You had a very mysterious conflict going on ...

Wow, that was a really sad ending. And I liked this. And I totally understand the butterfly with the skull thing. It was a perfect symbol of death and beauty ...

This was a decent poem. I'm not an expert at poetry, however, so don't quote me on the things I say! :wink: The main point of your poem was pretty ...