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Hey, Sorsha2! I'm here at your request and I'm actually really excited because I remember reviewing your prologues and I had been wondering if this was being thanks for posting ...

Hiya, player109! I see that you are new to YWS so I just want to say hi! :D lol Okay, back to your review... Comments will be in bold, corrections ...

[s]Okay, Angel, this is super long and I'm at have no time to correct. But please remind me to come back here by a Pm or I'll just come back ...

Okay, I found this to be very powerful. It seems that everyone pretty covered the line-by-line review so I'll just cover the overall thought. First, the beginning I found to ...

This was good. Your main idea for this was unique and priceless. :D But you missed out on a lot by just us the overall picture. We want to know ...

This is a really cute thought and you have all the right elements for a good story...but something was missing :? I just didn't feel for the MC's as I ...

This version was so much better, luc! No lie! I totally understand why she left now and everything. And it was so cute the comment you put in there about ...

Satina, I thought this was really good, like all your work is. You already know I am a big fan of yours so I'll just cut right to the review ...

I couldn't resist reading all to the way to the end, Angel! :wink: Comments in bold, corrections in red. The Jane Effect By Angel of Death Part 8: Coveted The ...

I'm here, again, Angel, so hopefully this is helpful :wink: Comments in bold, corrections in red. The Jane Effect By Angel of Death Part 7: Flawed Perceptions Just when Andrew ...

Angel, Angel, Angel. You're work is so good that I just can't put down the mouse! I should be sleeping at the present time...but I think I have time to ...

Angel, you know the drill lol :wink: Comments in bold, corrections in red The Jane Effect By Angel of Death Part 5: Palatial Gifts Elizabeth doused the cloth in warm ...

Angel, I think you have a dedicated reader in me. So far, I love this story. Right after I got home from school today, I hurried through my homework so ...

I'm back, Angel! :D Comments in bold, corrections in red The Jane Effect By Angel of Death Part 3: Jealousy and Roses The blue of the morning spilled into the ...

Hey, Gracee! I saw this and the title caught my attention right away. I decided to copy/paste. All comments are in bold, all corrections in red. The night was cold ...