armstronge

This is good. I can feel the emotion in it! " Wondering around this now untouchable world, we can leave no marks or traces Now we’re done, invisible, our lives ...

First of all, the poem is really long. I almost didn't want to read it because it looked too long. You might not want to put "Jewelry store owner" so ...

At first I wasn't really into the poem, but the more I read the more interested I was. It's good, but you might want to make the front a bit ...