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Oooh, this is good :) I like it. It shows how carefree and naive we can be when we're little. All happy and bouncy and everything. :D And the last ...

Aw.... that's sweet, the last part. So, she's adopted? Wasn't that her real mom, the one that got shot in the prologue? It's getting better and better! Keep writing! :D

Ooh good. I like how you start it off, you know, with the mother being chased and the daughter is just a little baby. :) It leaves the readers wondering ...

Good. I like how you put the Mirror of Erised into the story, especially since your setting was in a New York private school. I liked the way you added ...

It was extraordinarily and amazing! I seriously felt Asher's sorrow when she had to let go of her child. :O It's awesome! The front part was a bit confusing, but ...

This story was really sweet. It showed how strong family love can be. I loved it! :D Here comes the editing part! :) I knew it was going to be ...

Hi Lolly! First question, is this true? Like are you really this Zoe? Or is this fictional? Also, I was thinking that you should turn this into a script. You've ...

LOL! I was cracking up the whole time! That is sooooo awesome! :D Very creative too! :)

Hello! :D Reviewing poetry isn't something I'm really good at, but, hey, whatever right? So... I liked this poem. Your words were a nice choice. One line I especially like: ...

They were sent to the hospital where they [color=#8000]were[/color] You have to remember to keep the same tense, example present tense would be something like "He is drawing." Past tense ...

A Poem by a fellow YWS user inspired me to write this. Oh , kind and ignorant child , how fortunate you truly are to have not lived long enough ...

Hey, I'm not real good at giving feedback when it comes to poems, but I love this! It's so true, about gossip and things when it comes to high school ...

Hey, so, I only see one mistake, where you spelled "the" as "teh": teh crashing waves seem closer Other than, I don't see any other problems. This was great! I ...

Hey, nice job! I loved this! Love: All is fair in love. But, I agree with Fand, the last part is a little weird, I don't exactly understand what Love ...

I'm not too sure how to review this either. Though I caught a few mistakes in the first episode. This was a funny script! :D I loved it! I can't ...