arianaSarroyo

I don't have much criticsm for this at all and I liked it very much. This is very well written so I can't really say anything negative. The only advice ...

Wow... This was very beautiful. You used such a broad and outstanding range of words here. There isn't much I have to say about this except well done. It was ...

I enjoyed reading this, however, I feel as though the ending was a bit incomplete. Try to conjure up a stronger ending. Also, I'm sure you can add more. Perhaps ...

"There was once a kingdom•" sounds a bit like a sentence fragment. I really liked the next sentence "there is always its counterpart evil". However, there seem to be many ...

I think this is beautiful, but I do think "I" is overused. Think about it, is it necessary to say "I" every line? Perhaps you can say, "no longer is ...

I enjoyed reading this poetry, but I have a few comments. The use if the word flower, while unique becomes repetitive. Try to think of another word to spice it ...