annaseale1998

Wow. Okay. So I wasn't expecting that! So before I go into the review: the title. A nice title, based on the prologue, but it has been done before. I ...

Wow. Whoa. I bet you already know this is great, but I have to tell you anyway. AMAZING. It literally bleeds emotion, without being to gushy or melodramatic. The title ...

Great poem! I just have one quick suggestion. You must do this to be cool. I think you should take this line out because you're going in to detail about ...

This really makes me think, just because it's quite confusing, but I like that. The one thing I don't like about this is the last line: "of knowledge, nonsense and ...

I really like this, a lot actually. Its message is quite simplistic, but you use a lot of good vocabulary to describe it. It seems to me like you're taking ...

So before I go onto the things I think you should change, I have to say that this is much better than chapter one. The first half of this chapter ...

My brain is literally on the verge of exploding with typos right now. Some of the things below arn't typos, but things I think you should change. the other end ...

Whoa. Seriously, this is good. I prefer it to your drawing, Cholerparagon. This one is so much more original, because it's almost like you've invented a whole other species (not ...

Ok. Whoa. My brain is just on overload right now. I really don't have a single problem with this. The beginning was very good, and one I hadn't seen before. ...

I think you should get rid of this: 'Perching on the roof, he resembled a mother eagle looking after her children.' You've already used a simile that starts with 'he ...

The first two lines are really quite good. They give a sense of a different world. The definition also reminds me of a modern computer, when you search up the ...

Whoa. This is practically oozing with emotion. The layout doesn't really matter that much when you're reading. I think that maybe in paragraphs it helps the whole thing flow better, ...

So, grammar mistakes. *"Well, what's the date?" *Kylie asked, slightly confused. *Kylie was so full of happiness. This was impossible, she kept thinking! *and they set off for the ferry. ...

OK, so, I'll review! I'll start with grammar mistakes. *to the sun's cave. *said the moon, very offended. *and after a minute or two Also, you need to put a ...

I lay on my beach and stare into space, to watch the stars move into the shape of your face. This was my favourite stanza! It's brilliant! I guess I ...