alwaysbeininspired95

i lovveeeddd that! my favorite is the stanza about the true. hahah this the best, it made me laugh and think and i love writers who can do that!

thanks so much for the advice, you have SUCH good points! i know i tend to keep everything all crammed together, it's a weird thing i do unintentionally. but anyways, ...

thanks so much for the advice!!! you're sooo right about everything. I think the reason for a lot of this not-the-greatest writing is because I'm working on another book that ...

wow thank you so much! I'll try to continue to make this story great!

ahhh oh my gosh thankyou!!! i don't think i've ever gotten a response like that!!! I'm SO excited to write more now, thank you! :)

OH MY GOSH KEEP WRITING PLEASE!! you have me hooked. this is awesome and should be made into a movie or play one day for sure!

This is really cool...i could see this more as a rap honestly. The first stanza especially. As i was reading it it sounded like I was rapping. nice job :)

so amazing. i literally cannot wait for you to write more about this!! i love how you describe all your characters, and I really like the mason kid. haha. keep ...

I like this a lot. It has a really great usage of words, and a cool ending. Yeah I'm just going to give you a gold star and get it ...

Oh. My. Gosh. Wow. Please keep writing. You are...wow. Very talented.

Thanks for all the awesome tips!!! I really appreciate all you guys said. It's funny, I was just looking through old diaries, because I always scribble down random poems or ...

this is good. it needs more detail and an introduction paragraph that really pulls the reader in so they want to read. The beginning was a little boring. otherwise, it ...