alwaysawriter

King Bursoda the 7th, Ruler of Elismary I think you need to spell out seventh. “Geez can’t a prince get a little privacy?” Comma after geez. “Think you took long ...

Yay, I'm the first one to review! *Sorry, its 11:15ish here and I'm sleepy* Em, em. Probably worst chapter ever. I still have no idea what part Jonas will play ...

The rabbit part kind of grossed me out (I'm a vegeterian but it would gross me out anyway). However, they have to eat somehow. The only thing that stood out ...

No one's actually picked this one apart yet! Yay! Not that there is anything much to pick apart, mind you. She reached up to rub the bump on her head, ...

I'm not sure if anyone else mentioned it but you changed the guy's name from James to Jimmy: “Nicole?” she looked around to find James standing there. “Sure, Jimmy,” Everyone ...

You asked for my review and I'm gladly helping. Though I do think that everyone covered everything; I really do need to start browsing the fiction sections for things that ...

I liked it. Everyone else covered everything else. I didn't expect that the hand would turn out to be from a vampire--it completely surprised me. I agree with Clograbby; I ...

I liked it but as I just told you, reviewing poems are not my strong point. You wrote it in a dream? Awesome. I need to look up procreate. I ...

I loved it! PM me again when you post Chapter 3 okay? :D I love how you end the chapters at just the right moment: The store, the car.. The ...

It was awesome day! :D The buildings were miles high, palm tree’s No aphostophe between tree and S. Why- why are you wincing? I think you need to use more ...

It was awesome! I noticed a few grammatical errors but that was it: He flipped what was ever in the pan around with a spatula. The sentence just doesn't seem ...

I liked it. There were a few grammer mistakes but that happens to everyone. :) He smiled at Kate wearing a black hoodie also, and at that, a pair of ...

You should join the Animals and Environments group. I wrote a post on Puppy Mills but no one responded. :( :? Have you joined yet? There's petitions and tons of ...

I liked it. Especially the beginning and the ending. My father is not the worst in the world. He does not beat me: He does not yell at me. He ...

I thought it was good. When he glanced over at me he grinned inanely and leaped gracefully to another block that was closer. Do you mean Insanely? "I don't suppose ...