alwaysawriter

I liked it. I did notice a few things though. Common, Come on before Capitalize the first letter of the word. Celina, and No comma. the only difference was that ...

I can't believe no one has reviewed this yet! I found it looking through the forum for things to review that had zero and you were the first one I ...

It was short but I liked it. :) Aaron lets me in, and No comma. I’m early, per Aaron’s request. This is an okay line but maybe try "I'm early ...

her she kept her head Comma after Her. Teacher-Suck up Teacher Suck-Up school was Comma after School. Day Don't capitalize. Mrs. Teacher suck up Mrs. Teacher Suck-Up she glanced Capitalize ...

I figured I'd review this since no one has. I loved the ending, by the way. I think I noticed two thing that you need to fix. 13.5 miles Spell ...

Alright, I'm convinced that the quotes hate me so if they work against me, I'll fix it as soon as I figure out how. Now twelve years later with her ...

Despite his tea Comma after tea. people needed it, and No comma. but always you would be there. "But you would be there always." maybe? no man, and No comma. ...

I loved the story, especially the whole dirt thing. I completly agree with Bitter. I saw that you'd posted from the homepage but for some reason didn't read it. I ...

Good job! :) I disconnected my landline months ago It makes her sound like an adult that has her own house. Try replacing 'I' and 'my' with 'we' and 'our'. ...

Ashlee got everything. I did notice that there wasn't a rhyme scheme but free verse is better anyway. My favorite stanza was The weather changing from summer to fall. The ...

A few grammatical errors but nothing big. The ending completely took me by surprise, by the way. :) "Uh, ice, where's Capitalize the I in Ice. "Up the stair, turn ...

Late morning, I logged into MSN, conversation pops up. What about "Late in the morning, I logged on to MSN and our conversation pops up."? Jai however came into his ...

Hi, welcome to YWS. I'm Alwaysawriter, commonly known as Always, Al or Writer (or an other varation you can come up with) and I'll be glad to help you if ...

I figured I'd review since no one has yet. I liked the story and the only thing that bothered me were the few grammer and punctation errors. First, however, I ...

Good job, as usual. Here's a few grammatical errors I noticed but nothing big: Natural two human abilities completely taken away.. One period, not two. Suddenly Kate felt a rush ...