alleycat13

Moments, Only for moments it’s just us. For a blink of an eye and the draw of a breath, we belong to each other. Just two people who can laugh ...

This is really good Loose. PenguinAttack stole all the lines I was going to point out to you. Although I think the "I'm smarter than them" is fine because I ...

Hmm... I can't decide if I like this one more than the other. I found some transitory relief watching a young couple exchanges smiles nearby--a fresh pair of lovebirds, still ...

Excellent! This is very high quality work. As Kylan said, your vocabulary and dialogue is great. I do think I told you before with "The Death of Dark Samus" that ...

Yay! I'm currently rereading this book! Well, I read it end to end straight through once, and now I just flip it open and see where I land. It's fun ...

First and foremost, I like it and I think you have a wonderful, mature style. All that grammar/spelling stuff is good ;-) too. Penny sat by the lake-facing window as ...

I like it a lot! The gazelle works well; there are lots of types of gazelles and some are golden. right away, I like the allusion to the "Queen of ...

I really like this poem. The theme of rain speaks to me, and I think you have some good imagery. A couple things though--> This sift and soft played melody ...

I read it a long time ago. I liked it alot. Wish I could remember more specifics about it though. I do remember skipping the chapter that just lists all ...

Sorry, but I have to agree with Via and Cade on this one. I think this piece has a great deal of emotion, and if you could just channel it ...

Welcome to YWS! I second everything Via said. Take that advice to heart, and it will help you immensely. I do like the content. It's a plead, but it's not ...

I think it's cute. I like how it rhymes. I like the first one better than the second. It has a better feel to it. Do you really have a ...

I read "The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn" two years ago for school. I liked it. I enjoyed the moral lessons in it, and it amused me. I really enjoyed Twain's ...

I think it's very interesting and has some nice imagery. However, I really think you should use some punctuation because it all just blurs together. Like Floydian42 said, the transition ...

This is excellent for a first post. You should definitely be proud of it. I also submitted to Azila's contest, but I think is a nice piece. I like the ...