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Re: Afterlife
I really liked the idea and the plot of your story. "Once he was gone Peter approached the women." It should be 'woman'. “Grade A?” She asked faintly, more than ...
Sep 25, 2011 -
Re: She Is Unforgiven
Sometimes your poem did not rhyme but still the use of your words make it good. What I dont like about your poem is its concept. Bit confusing apart from ...
Sep 14, 2011 -
Re: Ghostly Love
Hi,Narnialover4ever1 Starting with 'I haunt her, I know I shouldn't. Being dead is boring.' makes me think that he is obsessive or something like that. You used a lot of ...
Sep 14, 2011 -
Re: Winter Bloom
Your poetry is simple yet not boring but I didn't like the use of 'You' in almost each and every line. Sounds repetitive. I like the general idea but you ...
Sep 14, 2011
