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Hey Gyr! Sorry that its taken me so long to do a real critique. I've been very busy with school and swim team, but now things are slowing down. So ...

Yea! More critiques! Thank you all so so much! Metalhead~ In answer to your question about his motives...His motives are that he wants to find his Father and well surive. ...

Yea! I'm glad you liked it more this time. I have major comma problems. Either I don't have one where it should be, or I have one where it shouldn't ...

Oooo you did an amazing job like usual Gyrfalcon! I really can't find something wrong with it. I read it over twice and it is just written perfectly for me. ...

Don't worry Wiggy :wink: I know how it is. Actually I went through a lot of editing today after swim practice, and the piece has changed quite a bit. I ...

Cool, thanks blazing! I did your suggestions, actually yeah I decided to put a fight in more suddenly for a couple of reasons. In the original piece the only conflict ...

Thank you so much for the crit, I have asked my friends to, but they are not experienced writers and so its hard to get some real editing besides myself. ...

I really enjoyed it! Leaves you on edge and wanting more from the story. Like why is she in the prison, where is the prison? What's this thing taking multiple ...

You wrote that very well, I enjoyed reading it a lot and I have no complaints. Keep up the great work!