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Re: Love You Forever
I know truly deep, that I love you to death. And you love me back, so much, I don't even know how much myself. i didn't like this stanza. the ...
Dec 18, 2008 -
Re: Tomorrow Does Not Exist - Part I
this was really super amazing. like really. the writing was spectacular. haha. i'm a little bit blown away. i only found one thing that bothered me: Those days where he ...
Dec 13, 2008 -
Re: You say Guilt; I say Murder
It's a bit confusing having a huge block of dialouge between two people. The general rule is that you have a new line for each character that speaks. Like: “Do ...
Dec 9, 2008 -
Re: Colorblind
this was absolutely beautiful. i loved the language, and the reoccurring green. i really liked this. especially when you didn't say their name. both the narrator of the person they ...
Dec 7, 2008 -
Re: Bubbling, chapter 1
i really love satin's personality. all the little things you add in, such as how the tag is cut off of her shirt, is really nice. it just gives us ...
Dec 7, 2008
