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Re: It will all go away
Hey there. :] First of all, this is really good. Although, it sounded a little more like the lyrics to a song than a poem. You've left a whole in ...
Jun 20, 2010 -
Re: The Hideous Expression of Love
Hey there :] Corrections/suggestions are in bold. There was nowhere left to turn, she was surround by his lightning speed. Even after changing lightening to lightning, I realize the sentence ...
Jun 20, 2010 -
Re: For all teens
Overall, this is a good poem and I liked the idea of it. But, the rhythm seem a little off to me. The corrections are in bold :] I look ...
Jun 20, 2010 -
Re: Vampire Prison - Chapter One
Hey :] Thank you for such a good read! Your story and writing style kept me captivated. The only thing I find objectionable is your ending. It's very rushed. Take ...
Jun 19, 2010
