abake11

I really don't think the paragraph thing needs to be repeated, and I personally liked your exclamation marks just because I saw it as over expression of emotion which I ...

I liked how you had a bit of scenery along with a bit of what you'd be thinking, painted a really good picture for me and you had a pretty ...

Maybe I'm just a but sadistic but in the first killing where the little girl stabs the woman, the mental picture I had made me laugh a bit. If this ...

rough start but it was needed and the second paragraph kept me reading. overall, not really my thing but it held my interest which is ment to be a compliment. ...