Zontafer

Hello, Zontafer here to review your chapter! Nitpicks I was on my bed in Sheila, Mother, and my room, and Jason was in the adjacent room. Sorry for being a ...

Hey there! Zontafer here for a short review ^^ Nitpicks Iggy covered the most of it, so this will be a short one. My feet were freezing because I was ...

Zontafer here for a review! Nitpicks/Grammar (considering what you wrote at the start of your chapter) : His body made a nice, soothing shadow and, for a moment, the sun's ...

Hello, Zontafer here to again review your chapter! ^^ Nitpicks No, today I had forgot to set my alarm clock the night before and ended up falling asleep, then waking ...

Hello! Zontafer here to review your work. First I'll tell you that I have never reviewed emails, so this will be interesting! Nitpicks It’s funny, it’s like where having a ...

Hey, Zontafer here! Nitpicks She wondered just how many had already been lost, be it from the first attack, the impact or running out of air. A comma would fit ...

Zontafer here to review you! You didn't think I weren't coming, did you? I'll review it as I read! ^^ An endless void of darkness stretches around me, enveloping me, ...

Hey, Zontafer here to return the favor (You probably said it wasn't needed but I couldn't resist it!)! Nitpicks So, I usually start off with nitpicks, but it seems like ...

Hello, Zontafer here! First, a little nitpick: It's a wonder that he doesn't wake her up with his snoring, Roger thinks. I would have put this in italics and remove ...

Zontafer here to give you my possible last review of the Review Day! Nitpcicks The minute I glanced at my clock I had to do a double take before tearing ...

Zontafer here ^^ Nitpick I didn't even realize I was crying until I pulled away and noticed the tear stains I had left on his shirt. I didn't even know ...

Zontafer here ^^ Nitpicks It was fairly big, and the sun shown through the only window with the white shades open. Shown should be shone. Are kids always this stubborn? ...

Hello, Zontafer here to give you another review! ^^ Nitpicks I started making my...bottom of the stairs. In your second paragraph, you started all the sentences with 'I'. Cut down ...

Hello, Zontafer here! First off, I wanted to say that I agree with Auxiira and Iggy that this feels a bit different from your prologue, but don't get me wrong, ...

Hello, Zontafer here! Nitpicks That would be the one word to describe how I felt. Confused, and shocked, and worried, and scared, and a bunch of other words along with ...