Zeera

Well actually, I am doing that. But it's in a story that I'm going to publish. It probably won't be published anyways. But I'll give it a try. I think ...

Thanks for pointing out my mistakes. Although I don't agree with some things. I didn't mean for "The four leaders of The Believers" to be rhymy, but it's just a ...

I'm going to describe the demons in another chapter..

This was a nice mix of Sci-fi and Fantasy, but I don't think they end up well together. But it all depends on the writer.

Nice writing. The best way to make a reader read on is to make the story mysterious, as you have done, so they want to know what happens. Good Job.