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Thanks, Poltergiest and Roya! Yeah, I love how short it is. ^_^ It's fitting for the end. And it's fine that you don't know what the beads mean. I think ...

*rated R for language* (one mention of the F word indicates R)

*rated R for sexual content*

I thank you both profusely (can't get out of old English can I) Haha, old English is awesome. Anyway, great job editing it. It looks much better already. The ending ...

Brilliant - I love the spatulas. :wink:

*eats critique* I love you, Snoink! Off to edit!

Okay, so I couldn't keep away. :P I love the detail in this - it's simply wonderful and it flows so naturally. The ambulance lights painted a bloody collage on ...

Thank you so much, Dark Lordess. ^_^ Critique is appreciated. I am very concerned about the pace of the action in this chapter, and before I start rewriting chapter 8, ...

I understand what you mean, but by asking you to show and not tell, I am by no means asking you to include action in the beginning. I am just ...

Thanks so much, Jack. I really needed to hear that; I easily lapse into excessive adjectives until someone knocks me on the head and tells me to cut down. ^_^ ...

*blushes* Thank you. Eeep, thanks for pointing out the rose vs. flower thing, McMourning. I never noticed that before. The flowers allude to the prologue of the first book, Flames ...

*huggles* I love you, Cal! You have no idea how helpful those comments were. :D

Thanks for the suggestions, Roya. I was a bit shaky about that part with the 'tell me who your father is' too. Last scene of chapter 7 (from Markus's POV! ...

Thanks for the comments, Claudette. I haven't made any changes to this thread, but I've done a little cutting on the hard copy. Thanks for the pointing out some of ...

*spacing fixed at author's request* :D