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Heya! This seems to get better each chapter. I still really like Valentine. :D Grishtog You have done a good job of allowing the reader to feel Grishtog's character; your ...

Quite good, Mike! I enjoyed this chapter immensely. I like Valentine a lot. Your description is much, much better here; I get a very vivid feel for where Sendoma is ...

Hello there Fael. This was an interesting prologue, and I did like your dialogue. I would like to see where this is going. But first, there is something we need ...

Valentine! I like him already. This part was quite good - I liked Sendoma letting go of the power and the werewolf was very interesting. The one thing that kept ...

You have a very unique writing style. :D I like it. I second Sam's comments - she covered most of what I noticed. So far, the first person seems quite ...

Hey Sean! This was a pretty good start - you had some good characterization of Tyr and Caer and I am very interested to see where this is going. Detail-Dumping ...

Yes! I was very excited to see this posted, not to mention it features the long-awaited return of Myles! Anyways, this was very enjoyable, and Myles is very cool. I ...

Hey Alanna, If you space this correctly (it tells you how in the Before You Post sticky), I would be happy to read over it and give you some suggestions, ...

Oooh, fascinating. I really enjoyed this. Much less island-hopping in this section and your characterization improved immensely. Every chapter seems to get better! There were a few grammatical and spe

I read Eragon sometime last year, and I didn't absolute hate it, but I didn't think it was that great. I mean, it was a rather mindless thing to read ...

Ooooh, the plot thickens. This is pretty good. Your phrasing and sentence structure is improving immensely! Island-Hopping No, I'm not talking about the Pacific Theater style of battle during World ...

As the nitpicky sentence stuff has already been picked apart by those above, I'll comment on the general flow of the story and the characters. You have a very good ...

Oh, this was very good - flowed very naturally and the image in the mirror was pretty neat. I just love your style. :P There were a few spelling and ...

Hey duckie! I really like your writing style - you have some great description here and the orphan boy is so cute. :P My only concern here dealt with pace. ...

I really like Matthias - not to mention Matthias is one of my favorite names ever. :wink: You conveyed the relations between Matthias and Luke very well and made it ...