Wolferion

Greetings! Let's cut straight to the chase and capture. I've copied your work inside the "spoiler" with my commentaries and points. After the spoiler there's a general conclusion to the ...

Cheers! Let's reconstruct it, shall we. I'll first go over the grammar that I found wrong/weird and awkward moments that didn't work. The edits are in the spoilers. ACROSS THE ...

Cheers =) Before I start talking about the impression, you missed capitalization here ; “let’s see, ___", 8th paragraph from the bottom. I find the way this seems 'light' and ...

Seems to me like you're trying to keep the same pace of show/tell ratio, you never really stop to properly describe something, you do a quick sum up of something ...

To understand what I'm writing here, do please read the review in your Imagine if you would : Chapter 1 first. While I admit this is somewhat better than the ...

Cheers! I'll start with the longer work of the two you sent me, so let's get crackin'. Since I can't put your text into a spoiler anymore and highlight my ...

Cheers! =) Here as asked, so let's get cracking. I've put your poem in the spoiler with my commentaries. Just give me a reason For letting you ruin my sanity. ...

Cheers! =) Here as requested! Your work, alongside my comments, is in the spoiler! You slow down to a stroll, letting him run ahead. His laughter echoes in your ears ...

Cheers! Well, we've discussed a lot on the chat, so let me skip to the places I want to point out. As typical for me, they are in the spoiler. ...

Cheers! Let's get crackin', shall we? Ikuzou! I've put your story in the spoiler with my personal comments and inputs. His mother killed herself four years after he was born. ...

Cheers! Usual procedure, the poem with my comments is in the spoiler =) How can one feel so alone, - this comma feels unnecessary. In a world bursting with people? ...

Cheers! Let's get to business, shall we. I'm on a phone, so it's tough to use references, but I'll try to be specific. The imagination you offer to the reader ...

Cheers! Welcome to our society =) Hopefully, you'll get to meet good members sometimes soon, for now I hope my help will suffice. My specialty is trying to find anything ...

Hiya! Here as requested =) I've put your poem into the spoiler. Every step planned, every movement precise , like a perfectly executed dance. Nothing (is) out of place, out ...

Since the reviews before me nitpicked grammar, I'll focus more on the impression and the style of your work. The lines of descriptions you have... They kind of resemble a ...