WillowCutz

Just did some minor edits.

Awwwwwww! :D thanks!!! And also I am a major elipses.... Fan. Fan. Definately.... *looks off into the distance as three red dots appear on my forehead.* a fan... I understand ...

This is the second half of the review below it. Sorry, I had to leave before I could finish, so I had to write this in two parts. “Where are ...

Note: the reply system does not know what quotation marks are.(sorry bout that. I'M GONNA POST THE SECOND HALF OF MY REVIEW ABOVE!

%u201CWhere are you going?%u201D Lucius glared at the brown-haired man. You%u2019ve mentioned that he has brown hair quite a few times now. If you don%u2019t want to call him %u201CChristopher%u201D ...

I actually just added this to my recommended reading on my profile description. (I really love Luke, he's funny as cheese)

So for childishness the way you describe a character has a big pushing force. Specific words just tend to SOUND older, and those just stick in your head subconsciously. The ...

You have a very like... Out of the scene sort of voice. Like she's in the scene but she's really more of a car in a car wash (you know ...

You have a very like... Out of the scene sort of voice. Like she's in the scene but she's really more of a car in a car wash (you know ...

“She kneels down to pick some, tucking one in her hair in the process." sounds incidental, like she didn't mean to do it, also in her hair could be anywhere, ...

Sorry i confused you! :D but thanks for the feed back!

Sorry, no Theodora (sad face) I was having a hard time writing at this point in the story, something about the romance and all that just made me rush and ...

Too bad about finding out what she learned. Cause to be honest I totally lost it after this chapter. Like lost it. Sitting in my bed questioning everything lost it. ...

No problem, it,s a great poem really. But maybe less sprinkles more dipped cone? (The metaphor does not extend for me :D)

Yeah, I've worked on the scene to make it better (ish, I'm really bad a revising). Basically Belinda is a sex repulsed asexual (the reason there is no mention of ...